3rd world merchant
Sally is a mother of three children, two of which are still in school. She and her husband run there own business which they opened in 2007.Together they run a general store at a station. There business has been moderately successful but they need more money to add to there inventory. That’s why sally is requesting her loan from Kiva partner VisionFund Indonesia.With this loan, sally can improve her business and give her children to a better education.
I Believe this group is a good investment of money because it is going to somebody with a solid plan. Sally knows exactly what she wants to do with the funds she'll receive. As an entrepreneur she's shown she has ambition and drive. I feel like that gives her the best chance to put the money to worthwhile long term use. I also feel that Indonesia having been devastated by natural disasters could use as much money pumped into there economy as possible.
I encourage everyone to check out http://www.kiva.org . Every case on there is a worth while one. But I believe Sally's case is the most worth while. If you have some extra money that you can spare for one of these causes it would be most gracious of you to donate it.
I like the title. You would have convinced me to donate. It was a good choice to write about.
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ReplyDeleteI agree with the first comment, You would have convinced me as well. I think you did an excellent job on this, I feel this group is very much donating to as well. :-)
Jessi Lewis
I like the fact that you have targeted someone in Indonesia since I was there. Remember your purpose is to convince me who will be donating as part of my plan to loan $50 to a women's group. You should have put your thesis first and personalize it. I propose that you invest your $50 to an Indonesian woman who......
ReplyDeleteIn another paragraph list your reasons why I should lend to Sally.
Conclude with what I should do. I am already familiar with the site, so encouraging me to check out www.kiva.org was unnecessary information.
Also, please proofread your work for errors in grammar and mechanics to establish your credibility as a writer (there vs. their and many more mistakes).